Friday Fictioneers – Stunning just stunning!

A new Friday Fictioneers photo prompt. Thank you Rochelle! And thank you Jennifer Pendergast for this wonderful photograph. For more information on how to be a part of the Friday Fictioneers (a great opportunity to practice your writing craft), click on the link above! My offering follows, I hope you enjoy!

Photograph copyright Jennifer Pendergast 2013

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Tilting his head back as far as it would go he strained his neck, looking at the magnificent staircase. Stunning just stunning!

His nature to do so, he stands in quiet contemplation. His thoughts, the probable mentality of the architect drafting this design – an amazing masterpiece. Stair steps spiraling one above the other, on and on, seemingly without end.

With a change of perspective and attitude, his gaze turned to the items he had brought.

Painful reality, Ah yes. With a weary but determined set to his shoulders he gives a huge sigh and reaches down. Worn hands picking out needed items, he thinks one final thought about the architect – his newest nemesis. There certainly hadn’t been any consideration given as to who or how someone would be cleaning the thing.

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A brief note here: When I first published this, the story was from the perspective of a female cleaning lady. But the more I thought about it, it seemed to me that it would play even better with a man in the role (a janitor type of personality), so I rewrote the original version to the one you see now!

Thank you,

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Penny

70 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – Stunning just stunning!

    • Yeah, I agree, we all have those moments of “wow that is so beautiful” and those moments of “Oh … crap!” I like to think I worded it more delicately in the written piece though. lol, Thank you.

  1. The position of how something might be cleaned determines whether or not I will get a knick-knack (more often not). I can imagine having to clean those rails… OhhHHhh heck no!

  2. Great story, it works so well. I loved the line …’he thinks one final thought about the architect – his newest nemesis’ – says everything.
    Very enjoyable
    Dee

  3. I like his perspective. He has an eye for the architectural beauty. and then whack the realization for the reader regarding the work involved adds another spin that we can all appreciate

  4. I thought he was going to have to carry furniture up those steps, but cleaning them is even better. I love the lofty thoughts of the janitor – a profession too easy to stereotype.

    • I’m the first to glory in the beauty of a thing myself. So I did try to go in a direction that embraced that aspect, the rest was an exercise of thinking out of the box! Thank you, and you’re right about the now of things! Yes!

  5. Interesting how the sex of the character can change the image a bit.

    Like snow – Purdeeeee to look at – but – heck to clean!
    xx 🙂 🙂 xx

    • Yes, I also found that … well … most interesting, my friend! But universally speaking … your ‘heck to clean’ a huge truth, for anyone with that responsibility! 🙂

  6. Lovely story .. but it is an interesting photo.. normally one would have taken it in the center of the spiral.. so a different perspective in the photo and you changed your story giving a different perspective… loved it.,.

  7. I loved your take on this one! It was your ability to be so very creative and spectacularly write this that prompted me to give it a try this week! Thank you for all ways inspiring me! Love and Hugs!!! ❤ ❤

  8. Penny, this reminds me of the library near us that was in an old mansion. The girls used to say, “Mom, wouldn’t you love to live there?” and I would say that I wouldn’t want to have to clean it. Their response was that if I could live there, I would be able to afford to have someone to clean it. 🙂

    janet

  9. I think when I come back from the shop, I’m going to see if I can have try and have a go at this, I have seen so many good ones. Your one made me laugh though 🙂

    I love it,

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