Yes time again for being extra creative, thinking out of the box, and clever with your word usage. Flash fiction of 100 words or less based on a creative photo prompt! I’m referring to, of course, the Friday Fictioneers. Thank you Rochelle for bringing us another opportunity to fulfill the above. If you enjoy writing, give it a try, for more details click on the link above.
And now for the photo prompt, thank you – Lora Mitchell, copyright 2013
And yes I know my story this week is more than 100 words, sorry about that! Still hoping you enjoy!
The most important thing is the setting of the stage. Everyone knew that, even the most novice actress.
Take the Easter lily for example, She thought to herself, settling more comfortably on the sofa, first imported from Japan in the mid twentieth century as she herself had been.
There was the nighttime panorama of the city, home for half a century, the place of her success. Working her way from unknown to world famous actress of stage and screen.
Not long now, she thought. Her vision was fading rapidly, too much damage from her tragic fall off the stage.
Fateful words, “we can’t repair your eyes, ma’am” both corneas were too badly lacerated!”
With quiet patient determination she sat alone and waited … like a final curtain call … for her final view.
Thanks for the read,
53 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers … The final view!”
A rainy Sunday night and I’m finally getting to your story. Thanks for your comment on my story. You wrote an interesting story, complete with decades of back story and a sad ending. ron
Sorry about the rain there, hope today the sun is shining for you. Thank you for your visit and compliments, yes it is sad, but if I had used more words (lol) I would have added “tomorrow begins a brave new adventure!”
Very well done Penny…could truly feel the emotion in this one. 🙂
Thanks LuAnn! 🙂
an unexpected turn of events…falling off the stage for the actress, then losing her eyesight. oh, the agony of this curtain call. but perhaps, she will use her dramatic talents and rise again to live on stage once again. the applause calls her and who can resist! great story, Penny! ♥
She will indeed and go on to greater glory as well! 🙂
yay! encore!! :p
How sad that would be to lose your vision and no longer enjoy the beauty of flowers.
Yes, I agree. And courageous as she waits for her “brave new world of adventures” continuing in spite of a loss of sight. She still is a noble lady who carries on (as I picture her anyway)!
Good for her!
I also went with loss of sight as well as sanity…
I wonder if there are blind actors? Think of all the things Helen Keller did.
Yes, it was the loss of sight. I wonder if there are blind actors also, good question. Yes Helen Keller, an amazing woman. Thank you for your compliments, Penny
Very nice story Penny, but please tell me as she waits, is she about to die? Has she set her final scene and ended her life, waiting for some drug to take effect perhaps? There was a sense to me that the end was close, I hope she didn’t suffer. 🙂
Thank you. Had there been more word space I would have added that tomorrow begins the start of a brave new adventure with her portraying a new role with courage and determination. 🙂
Great story – when I got to the line about her vision being damaged I realised this could be the last thing she saw – it gave the picture a whole new meaning.
Thank you very much. I was hoping to accomplish that.
What a poignant story. You did a great job tying the character to the lily metaphorically.
Thank you David!
a sad story this time..nicely done, Penny
It is Padmini, as is life, both the sad parts and the happy parts my friend, thank you my friend! 🙂
I like the way she refers to herself as an import from Japan. In a few words you painted a picture of your MC and gave us a little lily history. Nice job.
Thank you very much Rochelle! 🙂
Such a well written sad story…Nice use of the prompt!
Thank you Tom.
You are welcome.
It is a sad story but well written.
Thank you. It is sad, there is sadness in life but she is also brave with her attitude, I wanted to convey both. Again, my thanks for your taking the time to read and comment on my story. It is appreciated by me.
My favorite line was “first imported from Japan in the mid twentieth century as she herself had been”. What a unique way to convey her story. This is great, a summary of her life and the future.
Thank you very much Joe. 🙂
Sad indeed, But a life well lived. Great story, Penny 🙂
Thank you Celestine, my friend! 🙂 xx
Very sad – and an unusual take on the prompt, which wasn’t an easy one this week.
Thank you Sandra, it was unusual, I did scratch my head for awhile on this one. lol.
What a sad story so well expressed… in sooo many words… (Leg pull) seemed like a 100 to me…
Thank you Bulldog. You leg-pulling worked. I have a huge smile on my face, a great way for me to head off to bed now! Thanks for the recount! xx
Creative use of the prompt. Love how you used it!
Thank you very much!
Oh what a finale. Sad story.
xx 🙂 🙂 xx
Thanks RoSy! 🙂 xo
AnElephantCant believe it
Penny has talent as high as a mountain
Another great story
To cover her in glory
What a pity she is rubbish at counting!
Thank you for the lovely compliments and yes, too true, I did focus more on the story than on the count. Will try to accomplish both next week my dear friend! xo
Wow that’s good… really good… sad yet expressive. xxxooo
Thanks Roxi, it is sad, but she is also brave I think! xoxo
Brave is good… indeed.
Drat and double drat!! I had this all written out once and my connection went out, making me lose it. OK, once more with feeling. I like what you did and how you worked the title into the story. I felt bad for this woman. I’m guessing that her final view is not from her eyes but of her life.
As far as words go, here are some places you can get rid of words if you want to do so.
Just say, “There was the nighttime panorama” (nighttime is one word) instead of “And of course, there was the night time panorama.”
“…from an unknown to that of the world famous actress of stage and screen” easily becomes “from unknown to world famous stage and screen actress.”
“…With quiet and patient determination” reads just as well if you say, “With quiet, patient determination.”
Just a few ideas…
Thanks janet. sorry about your drats (that is so frustrating) and thank you. Excellent advice re: extra words, and I appreciate your taking the time to help me tighten and improve, I might add, my story, again sincere thanks, Penny xx
Such a sad beautiful sory.
Thank you deana!
Fantastic Penny, I really like this sad story. BTW your link on the inlinkz didnt work for me… check it out..
Thanks, I’ll try to redo this, it didn’t want to work for me when I first set it up either. Thank you for the great compliment!
That’s great. So fantastic. so sad.
Brilliant … brava
Thank you Alastair, my friend! 🙂 xx