Have fun, take the writing challenge this week. Flash Fiction (100 words or less from a photo prompt). Rochelle will guide your way.
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Photo prompt this week by Sarah Ann Hall, copyright 2013
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TWINS
“Oh, I like the single edifice you’ve added, darling!”
He looked at Amy, the spitting image of Debra.
The twin Amy had secretly helped him bury days before.
She smiled at him, squeezing his hand, “a perfect monument to a miscalculation.”
“What do you mean Amy?”
“John, you two were so transparent. I switched the poisoned glass. Its Amy buried down there, my love. I keep what’s mine, and now … there’s nothing you can do about it.”
Her laughter burning his soul, he stared at Debra in horror while mentally making arrangements for a second edifice to be delivered.
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(100 words – yes I actually can do it!)
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Thanks for stopping by, have a great day and better tomorrow!
~ Penny
The Why About This 
Love Debra’s voice – she clearly is not a woman to be crossed. I wish John luck in erecting that second edifice. I have a feeling she might be wise to him. Enjoyed this a lot.
Thank you. I believe you’re correct, Sarah. In fact I have this feeling she won’t need to wait for an edifice either!
Chilling & dark…. incredible depth of character in this flash.
Perhaps a little too much character (of the sinister kind, lol)! Thank you for your kind compliments. Very much appreciated by me.
John didn’t know who he was dealing with. Literally! Excellent, Penny.
Yes, a literal error resulting in terror (sorry couldn’t help myself lol), thank you Honie!
you’re a POET!! Ha –
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Oh what a twist, well done, well written
Dee
Thank you Dee for the lovely compliment!
Yay, 100 words!
I can still hear Debra’s laughter ringing in my ears, the old ‘evil twin’ trope given a new twist!
very enjoyable 🙂
Thank you, Yes rather a diabolical sound too! 🙂
Ohhhh, a little bit of “Dead Ringer” going on, huh? Gets down to the nitty-gritty. Great ending!
Thank you, as always it was a lot of fun in the writing of…
Talk about backfiring…
Hello Björn. Yes in a most unfortunate kind of way, for all concerned.
What a great twist. Nice job.
Thank you Shirley, Hard to feel sorry for any of them at this point! lol
Nice twist. What a diabolical woman. You did a wonderful job writing this.
Thank you David, much appreciated! Yes she is that, isn’t she.
Nice and twisted. Good to know 🙂
Thank you. The twist is the most fun in writing these, I think! 🙂
Oy! I love little twists like this one. Most excellently done!
Thanks EagleAye, twas fun indeed!
Wicked good!
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Yes (in most delightfully diabolical way)! 🙂 xo
You think like me! I love it.
Scott
Mine: http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/05/15/friday-fictioneers-5172013-genre-horror-humorous-pg13/
Hi Scott, yes I do. Thank you. I thought that myself when I visited your blog and read your entree, loved it too!
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These twins will do everything together
Nicely written to the poisoned end
Makes sense, like minds and all that! Thank you, very much for stopping by and commenting!
This one gave me chills. If I were him I wouldn’t try to cross Debra again.
She is certainly someone you don’t want to fool with. But since she still loves him or at the least considers him her “conquest” one has to wonder what will happen next!
Nice twist on that … loved it.
I love the twists and turns you always manage to add to your stories. 🙂
Thanks, to me, that’s half the fun! 🙂
Dear Penny,
Methinks that he should forget the monument and high-tail it outta Dodge. If Debra saw through the first plot she’s certainly able to see through the second. Well done.
shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you Rochelle, I can not decide who is the least of these three “bad guys”! But I’m thinking you’re right, Debra seems to stay ahead of the game of deception!
so dark this time, Penny. so well-crafted.. and interesting how you portrayed the monuments in the story
Thank you Padmini. It is what came to mind. Two entities sitting out there by themselves, neglected!
Yes, an extremely dark and scary story 😦
Yes it was, none of those people are really very nice types of persons, are they!
Maybe?
One can only hope, Yoshiko!
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He’s toast.
janet
Yup!
Magnifcently magnificent. I love it Penny
Thanks Alastair, as always I do have fun with these! 🙂 xx
You do. You have a brilliant imagination.
Thank you very much Alastair! 🙂
Penny! I didn’t realise you had such a devious streak in you 🙂 Love the path you took with the prompt.
Maybe just a teeny weeny little devious streak, you can hardly see it (mostly) lol! Thank you Lyn.
What a turn-about! John may want to make arrangements for a second edifice, but I’m not sure he can stay ahead of Debra!
I’m inclined to agree with you!
Ha! But now Debra needs to get rid of that murderous husband.
Debra seemed to be the twin who inherited the intellect of the the twins, she was spot on wasn’t she!
As far as the murder of her sister yes. But will she display the same intellect when it comes to “what’s hers”.
Ah, yes will he turn out to be the fatal failing for both femme fatale twins. That’s hard to answer isn’t it.
Except in our imaginations….
Oh dear, it seems there is something he can do about it… A nice twist.
Claire
Thanks Claire. It was fun to throw in the twist! 🙂
A thought twister this one. Had to read it a few times to get everybody straight!
Me thinks Debra may get rid of him first… doesn’t he feel the poison already working inside his body, maybe that’s what was burning…maybe not.
I agree jules, I spent a little time attempting to insure that it wasn’t confusing as to who was who (at different points in the conversation). Me thinks you’re right, I think he may have outsmarted himself here!
OOOOOOh Penny ! I love this switcheroo !
Thank you, I am glad you liked the little twist …oh what a tangled web we weave (we always seem to end up tangled in it ourselves)! 🙂
One way to solve the problem of identical twins….get rid of one or ’em 🙂
So true Paul, especially when it appears one is more desirable than the other, not very kosher though, and in his case not very well thought out! 🙂
Just brilliant!
Just brilliant!
(Well, they are twins….)
Anelephant can’t know how pleased I am to see you here. Thank you for your generous praise. Yes they are twins after all! 🙂 xo
Oh no! A tragedy of errors? So chilling and cold. Well done, Penny 🙂
Thanks Celestine. When I view a picture I do try to just let my imagination go. I saw two monuments and thought of twins, and the rest just spilled out! I am glad you enjoyed it dear friend! 🙂