Ligo Haibun Challenge – Geared to Immortality – Part 2

Another excellent writing challenge brought to you by Nightlake. The Ligo Haibun Challenge offers writers an opportunity to improve and hone their written skills, I encourage you to give this one a try, just click on the link for more details!

The prompt I chose for this week’s challenge was “Today Ten Years Ago” from those words I went with the theme “Anniversary” and 10 years become 10,000 years! I chose to try something a little different with this challenge. Did you notice the title reads “Part 2”? The first part is in my previous post where I wrote from a photo prompt by Alastair. It was fun teaming the two challenges together. Double the challenge, double the fun!

For your pleasure and enjoyment the finale to “Geared to Immortality“:



The succubus giggled. Sharing a human soul. She was so proud of herself.  For too long a tiring and boring process, always sneaking and seducing through dreams, drawing out life Alastairessence and then moving on to the next one. Sigh, so many victims, it became exhausting and boring.

And then an excellent idea – what if she were to cohabitate with just one soul, dwelling inside. She could accomplish the same thing through an innocent human. Delightful.

Such rich sensation of horror experienced by this human each time she viewed someone using her inventions – watching them wither away. How sensual and double the fun. Of course it wasn’t the invention – but no one knew that but the succubus.

And she had finessed the process now, so embedded was she within this human’s soul. Now each new invention used by another human stole only some of their living essence. They’d live on in a miserable half life fashion. Oh how delicious. Technology was awesome. 

Today, the anniversary of that first day she had entered this being’s soul, indeed a cause for celebration. The inventor knew something happened inside her soul that day, but still didn’t really ‘know’ …  The succubus sighed again, happily looking forward to thousands of years, inventions and souls to come.

an evil within
the price of technology
eternal victim



30 thoughts on “Ligo Haibun Challenge – Geared to Immortality – Part 2

  1. Very clever and complex – there is an ‘irrational truth’ in your words – quite rational if one thinks about it though, how technology separates us from nature, and takes us off our feet. This is really a thinking person’s haibun!

  2. Oh dear – I guess this can be said for just about anything that takes over your life.
    All in moderation – I guess.
    I like how you tied in both prompts!
    xx 🙂 🙂 xx

    • Thank you Alejandro for the compliment. I think it was her brother. He got bored too, so hung out in a small town setting to try his best to “Shake the Faith” so to speak”! 🙂

  3. I was glad I didn’t have to hunt far for part II. I wonder if each of us doesn’t loose a part of ourselves everytime we use technology. Children have lost the ability to imagine. Couch potatoes? And now with Cell Phones technology and the net is never far away. Well for some. My model is too old to connect with the net. But I remember a few years ago when we had a computer virus and was without the net for about a week or two – felt like I lost a limb.

    Thanks for your visit. I was stumped at first not knowing what the gears were for. I ususally don’t read anyone elses before I write my own. Often when we think folks mention that wheels are turning…in our brains when we are thinking.

    • Thanks Jules, I’m glad you got the part about my message re: technology, I think most missed that part. Easier to blame an evil immortal creature than our own inability to draw lines on overdoing certain aspects of the technological world we now live in. Too true about wheels spinning in our brain (love that song by the way) Thanks for your comments and the visit Jules! 🙂

  4. The cogs of your mind were really turning with this one Penny dear 🙂 Wonderful job, well done!
    I hope Miss Succubus gets her fingers caught 😉

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